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Tymir

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Tymir, I love your essay. However, it also seems like it's missing a few paragraphs. Where did the rest go? It looks like you only track his life up until the time that he is 12 years old.

I would like it if you could put a little more time into editing this and submit for a regrade. Please see the notes on your grading rubric and access your essay at https://ha.cool to continue to work on it. Email me at ereichel@philasd.org when you have completed your revised version, and I will regrade it. Please do this by 3/29.

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Proficiency Scores

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Your descriptive language paints vivid pictures, bringing your stories to life in a truly magical way!

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Your choice of perspective really draws readers into your story or helps them understand complex topics with ease. You're a natural at making your writing relatable and engaging!

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You convey your message clearly and effectively, making sure your readers always come away with a clear understanding of what you're trying to say. Keep shining your light!

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You're great at setting the scene and making your story come to life with all the right details! Keep it up!

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Your writing is becoming more organized, which is a positive step! Keep experimenting with different ways to structure your ideas for maximum clarity.

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Your stories usually have clear characters and plots, though some parts need a bit more work. Overall, they're pretty good!

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Your descriptive words add some life to your stories! Keep practicing to make your scenes even better.

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You're starting to get a clear message across in your writing, even though you sometimes wander off topic. Keep focusing on your main idea!

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You include some information, but adding more details would help make your writing better.

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Deepen your imagery by developing richer descriptive language and sensory details to immerse readers in your narrative.

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Reach!

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My Scores

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